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Learning task 1

Expected time frame: 1-2 lessons

These learning activities are designed to share language learning outcomes with students, to find out what they already know and to activate prior knowledge to enhance comprehension. The pre-reading activities build background knowledge about the historical context and what an idiom is and facilitate the use of prediction. It is important to be explicit about the purpose of each task with students.

Ensuring learners know the content and language learning outcomes

Finding out about learners’ prior knowledge

  • Find out what students already know about World War 2 by class brainstorming or using the 5Ws (What? When? Where? Who? Why?) for a hot potato strategy.
  • Use the disappearing definition strategy with the following text to help students learn and remember dates and participants in World War 2:
    World War 2 happened in the middle of the twentieth century. It lasted from 1939 to 1945. The Allied forces fought against the Axis powers. England and France were part of the Allied forces. Germany was one of the Axis powers.
  • What is an idiom?
    Cut up the definition below into phrases and reorder:
    The term ‘idiom’ has two meanings:
  1. a phrase which means something different from the individual words which make up the phrase;
  2. language which is naturally used by a native speaker, may be colloquial language.
  • Read this definition to a partner, then say it to partner without looking at the definition.
  • Explain that D Day is an idiomatic phrase because its meaning has been extended from an historical event in World War 2 to standing for something important that is going to happen or may have happened.
  • Divide the class into groups of 3. Write the following headwords of the vocabulary chain on the board:
    • army
    • boats
    • weather
       
  • Allocate one word to each person in the group. Each person writes down 5 words related to the headword which they think they might find in a text containing this word. Think about nouns, adjectives and verbs. The students read their list to others in their group.

Written language

Classroom resources 

Spelling City: This US site is designed to help children improve their spelling skills. It uses both visual and auditory (a human voice) input to improve retention. Teachers and parents can enter and save their own spelling lists that students can use to play games. The use of this site requires a paid subscription.

Professional readings

Combining dictogloss and cooperative learning to promote language learning (PDF)

Generation 1.5 students and college writing: Linda Harklau’s 2003 article discusses some of the special writing needs of generation 1.5 students (so called because they share the characteristics of both first- and second-generation immigrants).

Looking for quality in student writing: this article gives suggestions for analysing the good things a writer does. Learning to see the things students can do so we can teach them to do the things they can't. Levels 1 to 8.

An Approach to Factual Writing: Wray and Lewis on text types and writing frames, with clear explanations and exemplifications.

Sentence Combining: 2004 report on the role sentence combining can play in improving writing quality (The Institute of Education, University of London).

Knapp, P. and Watkins, M. (1994). Context–Text–Grammar: Teaching the Genres and Grammar of SchoolWriting in Infant and Primary Classrooms: This resource provides a detailed discussion of the concepts involved in learning about language, including functional grammar based on the genres of school writing.

Knapp, P. and Watkins, M. (2005). Genre, Text, Grammar: Technologies for Teaching and Assessing Writing: This resource examines how the three aspects of language (genre, text and grammar) can be used as resources in teaching and assessing writing.

An approach to scaffolding children's non-fiction writing: the use of writing frames (David Wray and Maureen Lewis)

Effective instruction develops students’ skills to make links to prior knowledge

Students’ ability to understand a written text is affected by how much prior knowledge they have about that subject. One of the simplest ways to help your students comprehend a more challenging text is by activating their prior knowledge.

As well as using prior knowledge activities routinely when introducing a next text or writing task, it is important that teachers:

  • identify gaps in students’ knowledge, build necessary background knowledge, and correct misunderstandings
  • help students develop independent strategies for activating and using their own prior knowledge, for example, students could learn to:
    • survey organisational features to ‘get the gist’ then reflect on what they know about that topic and type of text
    • check the adequacy of their prior knowledge as they read.

Effective Literacy Practice in Years 5-8 has a useful section on  prior knowledge that is just as relevant for secondary teachers.

Some activities that are useful for activating students’ prior knowledge:

Some key questions to focus teachers’ inquiry about students’ activation of prior knowledge

  • What student knowledge can I build on in my teaching of this topic or text?
  • What gaps and misunderstandings have to be addressed?
  • Do my students understand why I (as a teacher) routinely provide them with prior knowledge activities before they read or write challenging texts?
  • Do my students routinely activate their own prior knowledge of content and texts before they read or write, for example, on the basis of what they can predict from surveying organisational features before reading?
  • Do my students have strategies for identifying when the prior knowledge they activated is not relevant, or unhelpful?

Extended opportunities to develop strategies for activating prior knowledge:

  • have students engage in a prior knowledge activity such as a brainstorm, concept star, K-W-L, anticipation guide, or discussion
  • teach strategies that students can use to activate their prior knowledge, for example, skimming and scanning a text before reading closely and using that general overview to consider questions such as, “What do I know about this topic?”, “Where have I read a text like this before?”, “What does this remind me of?”
  • cue in their knowledge about the importance of activating prior knowledge, for example, “Remind me, why do we always do activities like this before we read?”

Deepening students’ strategies for activating and making use of their prior knowledge

Consider what you can do to help your students:

  • activate their own prior knowledge, for example, by surveying organisational features of a challenging text and completing a mental K-W-L before reading in more depth
  • select the most appropriate prior knowledge to activate, for example, when reading a mathematics word problem it may be more important to activate knowledge of the problem type than it is to activate prior knowledge of the specific context
  • review and check the accuracy and relevance of their prior knowledge as they read and write
  • activate analogous prior knowledge, for example, if they do not have a direct experience of that context or text type.

Case study

In Aneeta’s science class, students are encouraged to survey organisational features of text and think about their prior knowledge before closely reading any new text. She displays this poster in her room to remind students:

Skim and Predict

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Download the following Word document and create your own Skim and Predict poster.

skim and predict (Word 28KB)

Supporting Pasifika learners

Pasifika students

Teaching literacy in a way that is responsive to the diversity in our classrooms has the most profound effect on our learners. Strong school–whānau relationships, culturally responsive classrooms, and the deliberate use of effective teaching strategies can help Pasifika learners achieve success.

The Pasifika effective teacher pedagogical practices

  • The use of ‘sophisticated skills’ in teacher dialogue with students that encourages them to take responsibility for their learning and to think at a deeper level
  • Making the learning process transparent and understandable for students -scaffolding
  • Spending time on vocabulary and language including language structure
  • Requiring students to construct their own meaning from new information and ideas. 
  • Are strong in teaching core basics and they bring an interactive dimension to their teaching
  • Extend their classrooms into and draw from local communities

from  Effecting change for Pasifika students (Word 39KB) 

There are a range of resources and readings to help us begin to understand and use appropriate pedagogies that will enhance learning for Pasifika learners, and all learners, when engaging with the English Learning area in The New Zealand Curriculum.

Questions to think about in your school context

  • What would be a priority focus for your school in lifting outcomes in Literacy for Pasifika learners?
  • How can Pasifika perspectives and languages be used in literacy learning?
  • What strategies does your department, team or syndicate use to build culturally responsive contexts for Pasifika students within your teaching and learning programmes?

Examples

Building relationships with Pasifika students and fanau
Malae Aloali’i has taught English at Aorere College for over 10 years and establishes caring relationships with her students and fanau, and this impacts positively on student achievement. In this interview with Togi Lemanu, Malae shares her approaches to academic mentoring.

Strategies at work
Teachers use many different strategies to engage their Pasifika learners and help them to achieve. Their strategies work best when they are grounded in responsive and caring relationships with their Pasifika students and the focus on their learning is clear.

Resources

‘I Get It Now’ Enhancing pasifika writing achievement
A power point presentation from Natalie Cowie and Julie Luxton, examining the writing achievement of secondary Pasifika students, and how it could be improved.

What factors promote and support Pasifika students in reading and writing?
This investigation attempts to identify what literacy practices are perceived as contributing to success by Year 6–8 Pasifika students who are achieving at their age levels or above in reading and writing in English. It explores the Pasifika community's perceptions of the relationship between home–school partnerships and success as a literacy learner.

LEAP (Language Enhancing the Achievement of Pasifika)
LEAP is a web-based guideline for teachers that supports the learning of bilingual Pasifika students in mainstream (English-medium) classrooms in New Zealand schools.

Pasifika strategy NZQA
The Pasifika Strategy outlines NZQA’s strategic framework to support the aspiration that Pasifika learners become highly skilled and highly qualified, and thereby contribute to their own, and to New Zealand’s, economic and social prosperity.

Effective literacy strategies Pasifika focus (PDF 192KB) 
Summary of findings from the 2006 professional development project.

Light the fire – The power of community collaboration

light the fire image.

Light the Fire is an Auckland based group of teachers and leaders who are passionate about Pasifika ākonga and giving Pasifika students voice and mana within their school.

Each term they meet for a celebration of learning and talanoa about 'Pasifika enjoying success as Pasifika'. Guest speakers and Pasifika students share their educational journeys.

"You can make a difference – one by one – but together we can make a TIDAL wave of difference!"

Related video

At the latest Light the Fire hui, guest speaker David Riley shared useful tips on how to engage Pasifika boys in literacy. He also discussed ways that we can be more culturally responsive in our teaching.

 

New people, new place, new start

Writer: Linda Todd

Summary
NCEA Level: 2 Duration: 8-10 weeks

Achievement standard being assessed

AS90381 (English 2.8):

Achievement criteria

  • Propose research questions and select relevant information from a range of referenced resources
  • Present accurate information and draw conclusions.

Language learning outcomes

Students will:

  • select relevant information from a range of resources
  • brainstorm their topic to select keywords search using key words, scanning and skimming for information
  • read closely to identify language techniques and their effects
  • propose research questions
  • use note-making skills
  • use oral language skills involved with designing and conducting an interview
  • reference texts accurately and write a bibliography.

Introduction

In this task, students critically read several fictional and factual texts that deal with immigration issues. Students interpret their significance and value to the research task, noting how visual and verbal features are organised for effect, where appropriate. The class present considered, structured, and coherent reports based on their findings.

Curriculum links

This achievement standard is derived from written and oral language achievement objectives up to and including Level 7:

  • Reading: Close reading, Exploring language, Thinking critically, Processing Information
  • Viewing: Viewing, Exploring language, Thinking critically, Processing Information
  • Writing: Transactional Writing
  • Speaking: Interpersonal Speaking
  • Listening: Listening to Texts

Guidelines for use

Students are guided through the research process using the contexts of immigration and settlement issues, examining the ways writers and speakers use particular words and expressions and their effects. They also study exemplars researching the language of travel to develop their understandings about the how to present research. Students then select their own language research topics. They develop research questions to guide their research, record relevant information, then write up their findings in report form.

Conditions

This activity should be worked on in the classroom under teacher supervision as much as possible to ensure authenticity. Once students are working on their own particular topics they may collect information at school and at home but the teacher must check student progress on a regular basis. Teachers may show how the techniques used in exemplars can be applied to the students' own work. Students should write their research reports in class.

Between drafts of the written reports, teachers can advise students that their writing may need further work on ideas, language, structure or accuracy in spelling, punctuation or paragraphing but not correct errors. Students should have access to dictionaries to check their writing. Word processing is acceptable provided it is done under teacher supervision.

Teachers are directed to the Assessment Notes contained in the Achievement Standard 2.8.

Information used in this research report could be incorporated into a related topic to fulfil the requirements of English Achievement Standard 2.2

NB: Teachers using this unit will need to check that it accords with their school assessment policy.

Possible local adaptation

Where local adaptations are made, teachers and schools should ensure that they have:

  • Checked that the adapted assessment validly assesses the standard;
  • Checked the copyright status of any material imported into the assessment resource;
  • Complied with all internal and external quality assurance requirements.

It is intended that the subject of research should be related to a student's study of language texts. It may include information from primary sources (written, visual or oral) relevant to the topic/issue and secondary sources such as commentaries, articles, reviews etc.

Teaching and learning activities

Learning task 1

Learning task 2

Learning task 3

Assessment

Presenting your research

Refer to the instructions in the student assessment activity [Eng/2/8].

As this unit of work is assessed internally, moderation should be through the English department in your school.

Resources

Print

  • Tran, Dinh (1996) Fitting In, ed Grover, Paul, Voices Nearby, , Heinemann
  • Maniam, K.S. (1997) Arriving, ed Grover, Paul, Voices Nearby, Heinemann
  • Dediya, Ruby (2001) Nauru in 2001, ed Grover, Paul, Voices Nearby, Heinemann
  • Lay, Graeme (19 ) Soesa, ed Tabasco Sauce and Ice-cream,
  • Gavin, Jamila (2002) Forbidden Clothes, From out of the Shadows, Egmont Books
  • The New Wife Stones from the Spring. Choices: Settling in, Learning Media
  • Jansen, Adrienne (1990) I Have in my Arms Both Ways Allen & Unwin
  • Ng, Eva & Thomson, Jane (1992) Amongst Ghosts, Learning Media
  • Reid, Robyn (2002) Lift the Lid of the Cumin Jar, Wellington ESOL Home tutor service.
  • Stirling, Pamela (2003) Driving While Asian, August 16-22, The NZ Listener
  • Philp, Matt (2001) Asia Downunder the New New Zealanders, September 22-28, The NZ Listener.
  • Ruscoe, Kim (2004) The End of Despair, March 13, The Dominion Post.

Electronic

Useful websites:

  • Personal Stories
    Immigration experiences written by young people coming to the US. "Volunteers" uses the phrase "there is no free lunch in the world".
  • The Africans
    Unlike other immigrants, most Africans came to North America against their will, caught up in a brutal system of human exploitation. The treatment they and their descendants endured in the United States was of a harshness seldom surpassed in recent history, and their role in U.S. society was contested with a ferocity that nearly tore the nation apart.
  • The fear that renders ordinary people outcasts
    Muslims describe their fears since the Bali bombings and the subsequent backlash
  • The New Zealand Herald
  • The EPIC Database gives access to hundreds magazine and newspaper articles as well as photographs, video clips, essays etc. Access to EPIC requires a user id and password from your school.

Other

  • Hagley Community College ESOL Department (2002) "Refugee Students: A Hagley Initiative" To purchase this video contact the HOD ESOL at Hagley Community College: [email protected]

Principle 1 Know your learners

Know your learners - their language background, their language proficiency, their experiential background.

What do you know about your students' language skills? What do you know about their prior knowledge? How will you find out this information? How will it affect your planning?

School stories

Watch these examples of ESOL principle 1 in the classroom

Primary level: Year 7 technology focus

 

Secondary level: Year 10 social studies 

Learn how to  build a cultural village with your students. A collaborative way for teachers to discover more about their learners and their backgrounds. This resource can be used in a variety of ways, and enables students to share information about their country with classmates.

Useful teaching strategies to support Principle 1

Being Eve

Adapted from The Arts/Nga Toi Materials Unit - Being Eve

Adaptations for ESOL students: Christine Jones

Summary

Year: 8-10

Level: 4-5

Duration: 4 weeks

Achievement objectives

Level 4

  • PK - Developing Practical Knowledge in Drama
    Students will combine elements and techniques and a range of conventions to extend drama practice through a variety of activities.
  • DI - Developing Ideas in Drama
    Students will initiate ideas and make individual and collective decisions in order to plan and develop drama.
  • CI - Communicating and Interpreting in Drama
    Students will present and respond to drama and identify ways in which dramatic elements, techniques, and conventions combine to make meaning.
  • UC - Understanding Drama in Context
  • Students will investigate the purposes of drama in past and present contexts and describe how communities express themselves through drama.

Level 5

  • PK - Developing Practical Knowledge in Drama
    Students will select and use dramatic elements, techniques, and conventions for specific purposes and explore the use of relevant technologies.
  • DI - Developing Ideas in Drama
    Students will initiate ideas and individually and collectively develop and refine drama for specific purposes.
  • CI - Communicating and Interpreting in Drama
    Students will present and respond to drama and describe how dramatic elements, techniques, conventions, and technologies combine to create form and meaning.
  • UC - Understanding Drama in Context
  • Students will investigate and compare the treatment of similar themes in drama of past and present cultures.
 

Teaching and learning activities

  1. Learning task 1: Introduction
  2. Learning task 2:Technical elements
  3. starter (Word 34KB)
  4. Learning task 4: Being a writer
  5. being_dramatic (Word 51KB)
  6. being_productive (Word 36KB)
  7. Being Eve2 (RTF 19KB)
  8. Learning task 8: Episode summaries
  9. Learning task 9: Interview with Maxine Fleming
  10. Learning task 10: Behind the Scenes  (501 kB)

Learning task 1: The short story - a study in intense brevity

What makes a short story?

An Arrest is short story written by Ambrose Bierce, a celebrated American writer. It has used all the rules for a short story very effectively and in such a way that the reader "knows" a lot about the characters and the story teller's attitudes without long descriptions and comment.

Activity:

  1.  List the characters in the story.
  2.  The writer has "told" you a lot about Orrin Brewer. What are his concerns and fears about the woods? Write down the sentences that tell you.
  3.  How does the opening sentence influence your response to the story? What does it indicate to the reader about the type and style of story?
  4.  Bierce uses a series of similes and metaphors to build up the mood of the story. How effective are these images in developing the atmosphere and suspense of the story?
  5.  At what point does the story end? Could the story be extended past this point and, if so, how effective would it be?
  6.  How long did it take to read this story?
  7.  From your answers write down six "rules" that could be used to define a short story.

 A short story has elements of the poem and the letter. Its "rules" have been "set" since the first short stories began to appear in popular magazines in the nineteenth century.

These rules were developed by Edgar Allan Poe who said that a Short Story should:

  1.  Be complete by itself.
  2.  Be able to be read in one sitting.
  3.  Have every word used for important effect.
  4.  Have a good opening sentence that is developed throughout the work.
  5.  End at its climax.
  6.  Have no more characters than those necessary for the action.

What is in a short story?
 A short story is made up of several aspects. These are:

  • The storyline or plot
  • Point of view
  • The writer's intention or theme
  • The characters
  • The setting.

 The whole story is given tone by the way the writer chooses to tell the story. This involves both point of view and style.

Review activity:
 Read An Arrest.

  1.  What is the plot or story-line? Write a sentence that outlines the plot.
  2.  What is the theme or the writer's intention in writing the story?
  3.  Write a sentence that describes the setting.
  4.  How has the writer chosen to tell the story?
  5.  From whose point of view is the story told?
  6.  What is the style of the story?
  7.  Is there anything unusual about the use of time (tense) in the sentences? Offer some reasons to explain why the writer wrote the sentences like this.

 Choose one of the other stories from the Horror Masters - Short Stores website and use these questions to analyse the story.

Why Does a Writer Write a Short Story?

When a writer creates a short story s/he has several possible purposes available. These can be to:

  • entertain the reader by telling a "good yarn."
  • make the reader ask questions like why? For what reason? How did it happen?
  • take a position on an issue by conveying an opinion.
  • make the reader feel sad or happy, angry or pleased, sympathetic or opposed, amused or disgusted...

 A short story can have more than one purpose which becomes clear to the reader through the tone and style of writing used by the author, as well as what happens.

Activity:
Access short stories from one of these websites:

Short story archives

Note: These sites are essentially web-based libraries or archived publications which means that students should be given a list of Short Story writers they could search for on these sites to access possible stories for this exercise.

Suggested stories

  • Ambrose Bierce, Occurrence at Owl Creek Bridge
  • Edgar Allan Poe, "The Tell TaleHeart", in The Fall of the House of Usher and other Stories
  • Charlotte Perkins, (1989). "The Yellow Wallpaper", in The Yellow Wallpaper & other Writings. Bantam.
  • Patricia Grace, (1987). "Flies" in Electric City. Penguin
  • Frank Sargeson, "Boy" in Collected Stories
  • Owen Marshall: "The Fat Boy" in The Divided World. McIndoe. 1989
  • Eudora Welty: "A Visit of Charity" in A Curtain of Green. Harcourt & Brace. 1979
  • Shirley Jackson "The Lottery"in The Granta book of the American Short Story. 1993
  • Flannery O'Connor: "Good Country People" in The Granta book of the American Short Story. 1993
  • Kurt Vonnegut Jr: "Welcome to the Monkey House" in:The Granta book of the American Short Story. 1993

Each story has been written with a different purpose in mind. Read at least two of the stories carefully. Decide what the writer's purpose was in writing each story. Discuss your reasons and supporting evidence (quotations from the story or references to incidents, characters, aspects of setting, style, in the story.) with your teacher. Build up a list of purposes on the board.

 Note: These urls and text references can be used to develop responses for Independent Research (Achievement Standard 3.7) later in this study.

 Use this to help you work out your answers.

  • What is the tone of each story?
  • From whose point of view is the story told?
  • Discuss your answers with your teacher.

Beginning the dissection

 When you read a short story you should ask yourself:

  • How important is the title?
  • How does the story begin?
  • How does the story develop?
  • How does the story end?
  • Who tells the story?
  • What sort of language is used?
  • What are the images used?
  • What are the characters like?

 The answers to these questions will help you understand the story and the writer's reason for writing it.

The Title: Short Story writers will often "load" the title of the story to direct the reader to a particular reading of the content or to focus on a significant image or symbol within the story. For example: Owen Marshall uses the title "Cabernet Sauvingon with my Brother" to draw attention to the wine as a symbol of friendship, of unity between the narrator and his brother.

In doing a close reading of a short story it is worth while examining the relevance of the title to the action and exchanges that occur in the story. Consider the use of irony, symbolism, allusion and humour in the title as you read the story.

The beginning will introduce you to the important aspects of the story such as the setting or background or characters. In An Arrest the writer uses the ideas he associates with the woods at night, to introduce the feeling of fear and suspense, the things he feels the reader should know about and understand.

Check out what authors think about the importance of beginnings at:
How to Open Without a Bang

 The way the story is developed allows the writer to create a feeling of suspense, or surprise or tension. S/he can do this by choosing a particular way of telling the story. A simple way is by organising the events as they happen... first this... then this... then this... then that... then this... which led to the end.

 Another way is by using a rapid series of scenes that shift from place to place or time to time but are still obviously connected.

 Some writers tell the story as though the story-teller is playing the events through his mind. This can create a story that does not seem to have any organisation at all. This is a "free association" story..

The Ending
 As you read short stories you will realise that the ways writers choose to end the stories will have different effects on you.

 Some writers will tie up all the strands of the story so that the reader "sees" all that happens to the characters and can recognise the purpose of the story reasonably easily.

 Other writers, like Roald Dahl, will end the story with a twist ending that makes you smile or recoil in disgust.

 Another way to end a story is to leave the ends loose so that the reader has to provide the ending based on the clues and hints left by the writer throughout the story. This is a favourite ending for TV programmes like The Bill or Casualty.

ACTIVITY
 Class activity:

  1. Here are a series of titles of Short Stories, some of which can be found online, others can be found in anthologies in your library. Before reading the stories what does each title suggest the story is about? Offer some reasons for your deductions.  
    1.  The narrator's relationship with her husband?.
    2.  The narrator's state of mind?
    3.  How the narrator sees herself in relation to others in the community or social group?
    4.  The language used by the narrator offers clues about the setting in time and place for the story. From this brief extract offer some suggestions as to when and in what sort of society this story is set.
     
  2. Discuss the endings of the stories you read as part of this study. What sort of ending does the writer use in each story?

EXTENSION:
 Find, in the library or on the World Wide Web, examples of stories that use the different types of beginnings and different types of endings. Write the title and author of the story and identify the type of beginning and ending. Provide evidence from the story to support your decision.

Who's Doing the Talking?

Telling the story:

 Just as the endings of stories can be different and create different effects on a reader, the writer can also change the way s/he chooses to "tell " the story. This is referred to Point of View.

 There are several ways that a story can be told. The writer can decide to become a character in the story and tell of the events as they affect him or her. The character could act as a reporter and comment on the action and the way it affects another character or characters.

 The character will refer to him or herself as "I" and those involved with them as "we". This is called First Person Narrative.

 Another way is to tell the story with the author sitting outside the action and observing everything that goes on. The author will "know" what will and has happened to all the characters. The author will refer to the characters as he, she, her, him, they, their, them. This is called Eye of God narration.

 Stories can be developed so that the writer can "free associate" ideas to spin off events and thoughts to create the story. This technique can be used to tell the story as if the character is thinking. Because the story can go in many directions with the ideas linked by the narrator's thoughts this is called the stream of consciousness narration.

 Each method will create a different type of story and cause the reader to react in a different way.

ACTIVITY
 Look back at the stories you found for the previous activity that use different ways of telling a story. How did you react to the different ways the stories were told? Which way of telling the story held your attention? Why? Discuss your answers with your teacher.

Characters and Point of View:
 The way the writer chooses to tell the story will also change the way the characters appear. Short stories show the reader a particular side of a person or his or her relationship to another person. If you look at Frank Sargeson's you will see the story is told by the boy as though he was talking to he reader.

Because Sargeson has told the story in the first person we are told nothing about what the boy looked like, what his parents looked like or the sort of place they lived in. The boy does not think that that information is important because he "wants to tell" about his concentration on his birthday and how he sees his parents' reactions to his behaviour.

 A story told by a writer as an observer will often give more detail and information because the observer-author "knows" more than the author as a character.

ACTIVITY:
 Re-read Patricia Grace's Flies (Electric City. Penguin 1987). Is the author an observer or is she a character in the story? How do you know?

When the story is told through the character's thoughts (stream of consciousness) the reader builds up a picture of the character and his/her concerns from the many clues that develop from the way her/his mind flicks from idea to idea.

ACTIVITY:
 Re-read James Joyce's Eveline.

 Who is telling the story? How do you know?

 The point of view of this story seems to vary from that of an outsider observing Eveline to an impression that Eveline is "sitting outside herself" observing and analysing her behaviours and decisions. How does James Joyce do this? Offer a reason for the choice of such an ambiguous point of view in this short story.

The Distinctive Voice

 Some of the most important things a writer must remember are the words that are used and the way the characters speak, as these will create the moods and impressions necessary to impact on the reader.

Sargeson's Boy talks as if he was a twelve year old. He talks about the things a twelve year old might do in the language of a twelve year old. For example: "I didn't say anything. Instead I gave one of my famous sniff in sniffs. It was a case of urgent necessity."
 "Any how years and years went by and one morning I woke up and found I was twelve years old. It was all too marvellous for words."
 "I felt like telling her it was only twenty-five minutes, but I somehow thought with my father there I'd better not. But it was only the next day that my father heard me answering my mother back, and oh gee if he didn't lay it on."

Patricia Grace tells the story Flies in the way small children would by using short sentences and concentrating on the sounds, smells and actions that fascinate children. For example: "Lizzie and Nereana had just finished their jobs when Macky came with his fly.

The fly was on a short piece of cotton, which was all Macky had been able to find.
 "Get some of Aunty's cotton," he said, "and I'll give you some of my flies." He showed them the matchbox with the flies in it."
"The dunny seat and floor were still wet and stank of jeyes, and the flies, once disturbed, buzzed and circled and zoomed."

A good writer tries to build the story and its characters by making sure that the language used sounds like it would be used by the people involved in the situation being written about. If it doesn't the characters won't seem real to the reader and the story won't "work."

This means that if your character is a woman about your mother's age she would not normally speak in the same way as a school-aged person. The differences between people of varying ages and backgrounds can be shown in a story by the words they use and the way their sentences are constructed.

While style can create and develop characters it can also develop the mood and atmosphere in the story.

ACTIVITY:

 Choose three characters and situations from the lists that follow. For each character write a paragraph using words and sentence constructions that suit the person and the situation you place them in. Discuss your responses with your teacher and class.

CHARACTERS SITUATION
 teenage boy  on a marae
 teenage girl  at a wedding
 school teacher  at a funeral
 guitarist in a pop group  at the meal table
 lawyer  with friends
 TV personality  in the school grounds
 politician  at a social
 old man or woman  in a meeting
 radio DJ  on the telephone

 What sort of sentences and words were used by the writers of the most realistic paragraphs?

If the reader's attention is to be kept the writer will have more than an exciting or interesting story to tell. 

The Writer's Tools: Constructing the character using Adjectives, Verbs and Adverbs

 As you read the short stories in this unit you have seen how a writer develops characters by the way the person speaks or acts in a particular situation. These are techniques that develop from the story. At other times the author tells the reader what the character is like through the sorts of words and their functions in the sentence that the writer decides to use these can be adjectives used to describe the person, verbs used to state an action or adverbs used to change the meanings of the verbs. All of these are important tools in the writer's tool-box which you will use when you write your own short stories. While adjectives describe the characters or setting the actions that occur in the story are told through the verbs and adverbs

Editing the Story:
Used well, adjectives, verbs and adverbs build an effective story. When they are over used the story can become difficult to read because the action takes too long to happen. A writer will always try to "tighten the writing up" by economising on his or her use of adjectives, verbs and adverbs. Here is an example where the writer has over written the description of the character. The writer could easily edit these four paragraphs into a less "over-written" style which would be more interesting for the reader as well as getting the action moving a lot faster. Here are the opening two paragraphs edited into a less wordy style:

THE GREAT DAY
He was an awkward kid. His eyes squinted from behind tortoiseshell circles, his ears jutted from his head and his hair, cut with a view to economy, a stubble over his moonlike face. He clutched his school cap in his sweaty hand.

You will notice that the editing has reduced the two paragraphs to one while keeping the description, and the writer's attitude to the character, obvious to the reader.

ACTIVITY:
Discuss with your teacher the effectiveness of the rewriting. How has the writer's attitude to the character been kept in the rewritten paragraph? What words showed the author's attitude? Try your hand at editing. Rewrite the third and fourth paragraphs of THE GREAT DAY to reduce the over-written style of the writer.

As you edited the paragraphs you would have noticed that you removed many of the adjectives and adverbs that the writer used to fill out the description of the boy and the courtyard. You have seen that the writer could have created a believable scene which still let the reader know how s/he was to "see" the character. The skill in recognising where a writer has "over-written" by using too many adjectives or adverbs is one that every writer must learn. It is harder to do if it is your own writing that you are editing because you want to protect the words you have written. Professional writers will often use an editor to suggest possible rewrites or alterations to the story so that it arouses the reader's interest and keeps them reading. In the next activity you will analyse a short story to discover how the author uses the different elements to create a situation and tell a story.

Close analysis

Keep these notes beside you as you read Eudora Welty's Why I Live at The P.O.. They will act as a prompt as you do the analysis.

 THE ELEMENTS OF THE STORY:

 Like the novel and the play, the short story has the elements of:

  • plot
  • theme
  • character
  • setting
  • point of view
  • style

 Each element contributes to the overall effect of the story.

 As you read and write a short story you should keep the following questions in mind:

  • What is the writer's purpose? to entertain? to be thought provoking? to state an opinion? to play on the reader's emotions?
  • What is the writer's tone? Is the writer being ironic? sarcastic? humorous? serious? tongue in cheek?
  • How does the story begin? Does the writer establish setting or emphasise the background of the situation? Is the character given more emphasis than the setting? How much detail is supplied?

Look at your own short short story... how much detail is supplied by the writer? How much is supplied by the reader? A good short story allows the reader to flesh out the details so that the writer can get on with exploring the situation he or she is concerned with.

  • How does the story develop? Is it told through a series of blocks moving rapidly through time and space, like flash backs and flash forwards? Is it being told chronologically?
  • How does the story end? With a twist or surprise? With a build up to an inevitable climax or are you left hanging, being forced to supply your own ending based on your reading of the little blocks of action the writer supplied?
  • Who tells the story? Is the story being told through the eyes of a character involved in the action? Is the author standing outside of the action and observing? Is the author observing but within the action?

Check the use of the pronoun... if it is I, me, my, our, we then the author is a character within the story. The story is being told in the first person. If the pronouns are: he, she, it, hers, his, they, them, their the author is outside of the action and observing as if he/she was God. This is known as the Eye of God technique.

Another way of telling a story is as a series of thoughts, each thought block building up an impression or action. The thoughts can be told in a logical order or as they seemingly occur to the character... at random. This is known as the stream of consciousness technique.

  • What is the language and style like? The impression the writer wants in the story will be affected by the language he/she tells the story in or has the characters use. Frank Sargeson uses the colloquial, chatty style that creates an impression of 1930-50s NZ 'mateiness'. Yvonne Du Fresne, writing about new settlers in NZ, uses a style that reflects the confusions of word meaning and usage that a non-English speaker will have. The language is important to develop the character and action. The realism of the dialogue will influence our reading of the story and our attitudes to the characters involved.
  • What images are used? In order to rapidly develop a story the writer relies on the reader recognising particular symbols and references and understanding what he/she intends them to mean, eg. in Maurice Gee's story "Schooldays" (Maurice Gee - Collected Stories. Penguin Books) the lead character's red hair becomes a symbol for rebellion, challenge and freedom.
  • What are the characters like? The characters don't have to be fully developed. They need not have a name. They can be identified simply as "the boy", "the girl". "the mother." In other stories it is essential that the characters have fully developed personalities and motivations.
  • How important is the setting in conveying the ideas and mood of the story?

Formative Assessment for English 3.2

English 3.2: Respond critically to written text(s) studied.

The response will be expected to be in essay form which should include an introduction clearly stating the focus and scope of the argument, a range of points supported by accurate and relevant examples and evidence, and a reasoned conclusion. The essay would be expected to show accurate use and control of writing conventions.
Students writing about the short story must refer to at least two of sufficient depth and complexity to enable students to respond at a level that will achieve the standard. The texts would be expected to have significant literary merit/worth/qualities - have an established critical reputation or acclaim.

Learning task 1: Journal writing

  1. Brainstorm ideas on why people write. Write down all the different types of writing they know, eg. shopping lists, notes, stories, reports etc. Beside each type of writing give a reason for the writing:

    • Shopping list - to buy the correct items at the shop.
    • Notes - to excuse the child from sport.

    Look at the importance of the reader in all types of writing. Discuss and steer the children towards the idea that writing is communication between the author and the reader.

  2. Write a list of favourite authors and books. Ask why do these authors write, eg. to tell stories, communicate, entertain.
     
    Ask what do we know about these authors? Can we find out about them and why they write? Would they have good ideas for helping us as "budding authors"?

    The following book has many known New Zealand authors and has comments from the authors. Some are too difficult for the children to understand but others give a good insight into why and how they write, eg. Jennifer Beck, Margaret Mahy, Joy Cowley.

    Fitzgibbon Tom, with Spiers Barbara (1993) Beneath Southern Skies New Zealand Children's Book Authors and Illustrators. Ashton Scholastic, Auckland

  3. Getting started with journal writing will need the teacher to explain the difference between a diary and a journal (RTF 178KB) . A diary is a record of actions or what they have done. A journal is a record of reactions. A journal is mostly about the student and as such is writing about themselves, their ideas, thoughts, dreams and opinions.

    Explain to the students they can write in prose, poetry or occasionally draw illustrations. As long as the journal entry reflects some thoughts or ideas of the writer it can be included.

    Allow students ownership of their journal. It is private between them and the teacher. Sometimes they will have written about things they don't want anyone to read, [including the teacher] and the teacher must respect this. Students will label such writing.

    Journals are never marked for spelling, punctuation etc. The teacher can comment by responding in some positive or constructive way to the student's writing eg sympathising with their feelings, suggesting other ideas or just commenting on the mood of the writing.

    Provide students opportunities to write in their journals. It could be 10 mins of a writing lesson once a week or for a few minutes each day.

    Students will be asked to evaluate their journal writing once or twice a term. From their journals they will select a piece of writing to present in their portfolio. This piece of writing will be reshaped so that it can be shared with others.

  4.  After discussing the concept of journal writing give each child a prompts (RTF 20KB) . Teacher models journal writing by recording in their own personal journal. Compare it with a pre-written diary entry. Discuss with the students the difference and discuss how well you, as the writer, have conveyed thoughts and ideas. For the first week attempt journal writing every day, with the teacher modeling and monitoring the student's progress. Students may want to share their journal writing with the class.

    Over the next few weeks use journal writing when appropriate and allow the children opportunities to write in their journals in their own time. Use journal prompts for students who have difficulties coming up with ideas.

    Refer the children to the revise (RTF 23KB) and self_assessment (RTF 390KB) sheet. Model initial reshaping of a journal entry. Talk aloud your thoughts so the children can see how you change your work.

    Discuss changing names to protect the identity of people in the piece of writing. Let them see you work through the process changing your ideas and thoughts several times. Establish the idea that a piece of work full of editing changes is what we aim for, at this stage, not a perfect copy.

    Allow latitude in presenting the work as the children try out different methods for publishing, eg. shaped pieces, small books, word processed etc.

    When the work is published ask the child to fill in the self-evaluation sheet. Stress the importance of evaluating both the journal and the published piece of writing. The first part of the evaluation is asking the child to examine and analyse their journal writing over a period of time. The second is looking at just one piece of published work. The reason for choosing the portfolio piece will have been modelled first by the teacher. This will give the children ideas and help them choose their first piece.

Creative Writing

Teacher Linda Chapman

 

 Year

 Level

 Duration

4-5 2-3 5-6 weeks/a term/all year

 

Achievement Objective Being Assessed

Learning Outcomes

Poetic Writing  Write on a variety of topics, shaping ideas, using graphic organisers, journals and different genre.
   Make choices in using language and form. Publish work that has been shaped and crafted and prepared for a particular audience.

Processes

 Exploring Language  Explore choices made by favourite writers and identify and use common writing conventions. Apply these ideas to their own writing and use these language features to improve their skills.
 Thinking Critically  Draw on personal experiences and knowledge to express meanings in written text.
Show awareness of how written texts can explore relevant experiences and others' points of view.

Supporting Achievement Objective

Learning Outcomes

 Expressive Writing Write regularly, spontaneously and with ease to express personal responses different experiences and to record observations and ideas through the use of a journal.

 

Teacher background reading

Teaching and learning activities

Select and adapt these learning activities to best meet the needs of your students, and to fit the time available:

Begin by giving the children an exercise book and a notebook. The exercise book becomes their personal journal and the notebook a "writing ideas" book. Explain that these will be used for the duration of the unit and should be kept close for jotting down ideas.

Learning task 1

Learning task 2

Learning task 3

Assessment

Assessment Task

Publication of a piece of poetic writing, selected from journal entry, that has been drafted, reworked, proof read. Share with students, prior to writing, the assessment key indicators.

assessment (RTF 9KB)
self_assessment (RTF 390KB)
self_evaluation (RTF 250KB)
English Exemplar Project: Personal Experience Writing levels 1-5

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